A New Year
Started by Celeste, 7th January 2019 19:38 in Poetry, Books & Writing

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    parsonstreet
    I myself have been suffering from a blocked creative impulse.
    Struggling with mundane thoughts and pondering the banality of of the standard new year poetic output.

    Then just this afternoon I was out shopping for next years Christmas gifts in the bottom of the bargain bin when I slipped on a banana skin and knocked my head a tin of sardines becoming temporarily unconscious. It was on awaking from this unfortunate spell of nescience that I was hit with a sudden inspiration and thought of an audacious way to subvert the usual sentiment attached to prose at this time of year. I submit my humble offering below.


    "A banana skin inspired ode"
    A minimalist work
    2019 Parsonstreet

    Unhappy New year
    What a dreadful and tragic start to the New Year for you, Parson.

    The poem is rather good, although I feel it is on the lengthy side, and not as balanced as could be hoped.
    REES-MOGG for PM

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    I, in the spirit of wanting to help, have to suggest the poems are a bit crap.
    I'm a low educated, total guttersnipe, dim witted moron.
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    The poem is rather good, although I feel it is on the lengthy side, and not as balanced as could be hoped.
    You are quite right. Poetry can become dreadfully encumbered by too many words. With this in mind I have showcased my new revised version below.


    Year.


    Now for another one word poem on my upcoming tour of the Amazonian rain forests.

    Bananas.
    Do not let the oppressed retreat in disgrace; may the poor and needy praise your name..
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    parsonstreet
    You are quite right. Poetry can become dreadfully encumbered by too many words. With this in mind I have showcased my new revised version below.


    Year.


    Now for another one word poem on my upcoming tour of the Amazonian rain forests.

    Bananas.
    What a disgraceful travesty both these 'poems' are.

    Poor choice of wording, scans terribly, and is overly punctuated. Punctuational poetry is a COMPLETELY different style from Minimalist poetry. Typical mistakes made by amateurs who think they are as talented as professional poets such as myself.
    Celestine Gordson
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    Here is an example of proper punctuational poetry.
    https://www.bowlandcentral.com/forum...52176&p=952982
    Celestine Gordson

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    Please accept my abject apologies
    Do not let the oppressed retreat in disgrace; may the poor and needy praise your name..
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